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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:23:40 GMT -5
I haven't come up with much yet. I don't really know what to do next. This isn't that much, but could you critique it and just let me know what you think? And tell me, does it draw you in at all? Because stories need to draw the reader in, so they don't get bored and keep reading. So, yeah. Let me know what you think. I will post more later.
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:24:23 GMT -5
Fate is in Her Hands A novel by Jordy -my last name is here-.
The sky turned red. It flashed with lightning.
Victoria kept running. Her tears blended with the rain. She hugged the key to her chest. She wished she somehow never got a hold of that key. Never got herself into this mess. What could she do now, though? She had to get rid of it. She needed to do something with it. She stopped. Put her feet firmly on the ground. Then started to scream. As hard as she could.
She didn’t know what to do.
--- One Year Earlier.
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:26:50 GMT -5
It makes me want to know how she got put in that position. And what the key is so special for. Good job, keep writing ^^
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:36:05 GMT -5
Ok, that's good. I was hoping it would make the reader wonder about something... You'll find out....later in the story. But the key has great importance. It almost makes the whole novel...I think. And, Thank you. =)
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:41:04 GMT -5
Welcome ^^
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:46:03 GMT -5
It kind of sounds like something I would read. ^^
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:46:37 GMT -5
I don't really no what to write next. But as I said in your thread, I know where I want my story to go, but I'm not sure how to get it there...
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:47:22 GMT -5
well, where do you want it to go? that might be a good place to start.
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:48:02 GMT -5
Yeah, I hope it is. I'm not usually into this genre of books. But, a while back, I read a book like this and I got very interested. So I'm trying to write a book in that genre because you're supposed to write and read in the genre you like, or you won't be good.
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:48:55 GMT -5
cool ^^ good luck!
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 0:49:53 GMT -5
Ha ha, I can't reveal here where I want it to go. But I know. That's VERY simple advice. ^^ But...it gave me some help. Thanks. =)
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:51:54 GMT -5
welcome =) just let the writing flow. Don't try to control the story, just let the words control you ^^
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 0:52:12 GMT -5
glad I could be of assistance.
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Post by Jordy on Apr 3, 2007 1:17:27 GMT -5
I finally got a breakthrough. I'll post it soon, but it's not that good...at least that's what I think.
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Post by madandfrozen on Apr 3, 2007 1:21:09 GMT -5
yay! I had a breakthrough on my story too ^^
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