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Post by burntsmoke on Oct 6, 2007 3:36:25 GMT -5
Rowan and Fernlight were tiring me just a tad Maybe you could leave write their speech properly (leaving the 'w's out) and then put something like...erm, I dunno lol: "Midnight, why are Mommy and Daddy in that cage?” Fernlight spoke with a subconcious childish tone, her voice enlightened with a squeak. LOL THAT WAS THE POOREST EXAMPLE EVER I'll leave the exampling to Lady Heh xD Well anyway, other than that, I thought it was rather good Keep it up
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creamwolfgurl
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A moonlit plain~a flash in the shadows~Lunar is winging across the Moon
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Post by creamwolfgurl on Oct 7, 2007 0:47:03 GMT -5
Wheee! Things are getting exciting romantically wise, and action sounds like it is brewing . I sounded like a nob just then, I know.
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Post by burntsmoke on Oct 7, 2007 2:58:05 GMT -5
lol
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cloverbud
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animal fantasy writer
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Post by cloverbud on Oct 7, 2007 13:30:19 GMT -5
lol, thanks^^ and thanks for the advice, burntsmoke:D
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Post by burntsmoke on Oct 7, 2007 13:35:35 GMT -5
Oh, that's okay I just want to help make your story even better! It's certainly progressing.
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creamwolfgurl
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Post by creamwolfgurl on Oct 7, 2007 23:25:21 GMT -5
That's the normal way to say what I said. ^^ lolz, I'm enjoying it, but unfortunately are crap at offering adbice on how to change it.
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