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Post by snowkitty on Apr 26, 2007 21:47:50 GMT -5
It starts out as an ordinary road trip. They travel a lot and she thinks nothing of it.
"Next stop, Las Vegas, Nevada!" announces her father, and she just rolls her eyes.
"We're in the middle of nowhere. We couldn't stop if we want t-"
"Whoa!" A blaring horn invades her thoughts, and she is suddenly jerked to the side as the car swerves.
Something - large, scary, dark - crunches into the passenger side; her legs are pushed close to her and she is screaming as a seatbelt breaks -
- and she doesn't know it, but her life has just taken a turn for the better.
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Post by Jesse on Apr 26, 2007 21:51:38 GMT -5
It's...so very short. It seems like it'll be good, I like your writing style but there's not much to comment on with how very little there actually is there. Sorry if I'm being useless
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Post by mysteria on Apr 26, 2007 22:08:12 GMT -5
wow. I like it.
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Post by snowkitty on Apr 26, 2007 22:36:12 GMT -5
I'm glad. The normal chapters will be much longer.
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Post by mysteria on Apr 27, 2007 7:14:08 GMT -5
hey! you stole my phrase and put it in your banner! Oh well ^^
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Post by snowkitty on Apr 27, 2007 23:09:56 GMT -5
Hee hee - I know. xD
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Post by absgg911 on Apr 28, 2007 11:22:33 GMT -5
I like it, short but I read the first chapter and it SORT OF makes sense.
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Post by snowkitty on Apr 29, 2007 12:58:57 GMT -5
xP Is that good? I'm glad you like it.
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Post by absgg911 on Apr 29, 2007 13:40:08 GMT -5
I guess it could be good or bad xD but it doesn't matter I still like it, just a wee bit confusing @.@
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Post by snowkitty on Apr 29, 2007 18:28:18 GMT -5
XD I confuse people sometimes with my writing. I guess it's to be expected. I don't like humongous details everywhere.
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